My College Writing Experience

In my first writing class at George Fox University, I felt overwhelmed by all of the reading, blog posts, and written essays.  However, as I reflect on Sara’s writing class, I realize that I enjoyed every minute of the crazy schedule.  Her class pushed me to work harder, think faster, and be accountable for my grade.

Sara’s class has helped me to improve my writing in many areas.  The class taught me to be thorough in my research and creative in my writing.  For example, in order to fulfill the required word count, I learned to either research my topic more thoroughly, or become more creative by adding a personal narrative.   Most importantly this semester, I learned to not just plop a quote into my paper, but rather summarize the quote and relate it to my topic.  Honestly, this was one of the greatest lessons that I learned during Sara’s class, and I was able to apply it to many different writing assignments this semester.

Even though I have learned many valuable writing lessons through Sara’s class, I still struggle with a few areas in my writing.  My biggest struggle in writing is my tendency to ramble on in my attempt to make my point, only confusing my writer all the more.  My goal for my writing is to learn to make cleaner, more concise points, starting now.

Every writing project was enjoyable in its own unique way; however, I would have to choose the Explanation Essay as my favorite of all.  I enjoyed writing this essay because it gave me the opportunity to observe others and also write from my own experience.  I didn’t feel like I had to make things up or wrack my brain for ideas that were not there.  Rather, the ideas flowed to me from my own personal experience, and my writing came from my heart.

Last of all comes the essay I dreaded the most, and no, it was not the research essay.  Of all of the assignments given in this class, I struggled with the Review Essay most of all.  This essay haunted me the most not only because the topic was so very deep, but also because my personal experience relating to the topic was deeply personal.  I felt as if my personal history should be included in the essay, yet when it was, the essay became too much like a narrative on my life.  Without my personal history, however, the essay lost some of its context as well as its character.   In the end, I left most of my personal story out, attempting to summarize it in as few words as possible.  Additionally, I made careless spelling errors in my writing, and used way too many blocked quotes to support my points.  Overall, I was very disappointed with my work.  However, through my mistakes, I have been able to improve my writing.  As the saying goes, “live and learn!”

As I sit here with my cup of tea on the couch and write, I think about how far I have come with my writing process thanks to committed teachers such as Sara and Melanie.  Without them, I would still be lost in my world of ramblings and blocked quotes.  So a heartfelt ‘thank you’ to them for lifting me out of my writing rut!

Writing in my Past, Present, and Future

  At a time when writing is a constant chore, pondering how writing will fit into my future only makes me more stressed.  However, aside from the assignments, research, and constant stress, I do love to express my thoughts and feelings through writing. Throughout the years, writing has provided me with an outlet for my fears, frustrations, and provided me with relief.  Personally, I find writing to an audience that I care about more fulfilling than writing in a journal. 

  I went through a very difficult period in my life a little over a year ago, and the person who really cared about me and my pain was not able to communicate with me during that time due to restricted Academy rules.  In order to express myself, I wrote him letters for several months, storing them in a binder for his return home to me. Just letting out my feelings on paper to a person who I cared about was pure relaxation for me.  Writing saved me from more pain and heartache than I ever could have handled on my own that year. 

  As a future elementary teacher, I will use writing as a tool to create lesson plans, provide my students with clear assignment instructions, and write scholarly and formal journal articles for teacher magazines.   Keeping my writing skills sharpened is very important to me.  Constructive criticism keeps me reaching for new ideas, stretching me as I develop myself as a writer.  Personally, I have enjoyed my time in Sara’s class.  She has encouraged me to reach higher and push myself farther in writing. 

Should We Reward Killing in War?

Bryan Fischer:

Your article, “The Feminization of the Medal of Honor,” left me feeling disturbed.  In the article, you argued how our country is “feminizing” the Medal of Honor by only offering the medal to those soldiers who have risked their lives to save a life.  You suggested that our armed men and women should be rewarded for the slaying of lives, not only the saving of lives.   By twisting the Word of God, you attempted to support your conclusion that the Medal of Honor should be awarded to those who kill the most in battle.  Personally, I found your conclusion repulsive.

First of all, the Medal of Honor should not become tinted with the blood of the slain.  Instead, the saving of lives should be withheld above all else.  The emphasis on war should not be who can kill the most people, but rather who can save the most lives.  Alvin York, the great military hero of WWI, chose to save the lives of many German soldiers by taking them captive rather than killing them.  God created life, and whenever we can save it, we must strive to, just as Alvin York did.

Through the verse Colossians 2:15, you twisted God’s Word by justifying the killing of our enemies through comparing the act to Christ’s crushing the head of Satan.  There can be no comparison.  Our enemies are not “the devil” to be crushed through slaughtering, rather they are human souls drafted into their country’s army attempting to return home to their loved ones.  Yes, deaths must occur in war, yet killing others must not be a contest nor be rewarded.

Unlike you, I do not believe that our country chooses not to honor the killing of others because we are too squeamish, but rather because our country attempts to respect the lives of the dead, whether or not they are our enemies.  Yes, defeating our enemies in order to save lives is an honorable thing, but nothing to be competitive over.

So why encourage the slaughtering of lives through rewarding it with a medal?  Yes, death is inevitable in war, but while the darkness of death encloses all around us, shouldn’t we rather be rewarding the light of a saved life?  And since you are using the Bible to back up your conclusions, may I conclude that Christ gave His life in order to save the lives of billions of sinners deserving to die?  So next time you believe a soldier should be rewarded for the killing of souls, just remember that none of us deserve to be alive today.

 

Sincerely,

Auna Selberg

The Christmas Dilemma

Melanie Springer Mock argued her stand on the separation of Church and State clearly with the recent Christmas season disputes.  At first I was very surprised and even resistant to her suggestion that no government religious symbols should be displayed during the Christmas season.  However, as I read her reasoning behind the idea, I realized that Mock held a reasonable point.

I believe myself to be an open-minded, non-judgmental person.  If someone I know possesses a different opinion on an issue, whether it is political or spiritual, I believe them to be entitled to their opinion and respect the beliefs that they hold to.  I usually ask that person why they believe what they believe, not so I can judge them or change their mind, but rather because I have an open mind to why they may take a different stand on an issue.   For me, if someone wants to celebrate Christmas without Christ in it, I am respectful to his or her belief, but I would appreciate the same respect for my beliefs in return.

Lately, the people who do not want to celebrate Christ in Christmas have been forcing others to celebrate without Him as well.  How can they expect for us to give in to their orders, when we are just as entitled to live by our beliefs as they are?  Instead of deciding that everyone must celebrate Christ in Christmas or must not celebrate Christ in Christmas, why don’t we just allow people to choose for themselves, and respect their decisions?

Personally, I do not believe as Mock does that Christian symbols on government property must be completely banned. Perhaps a vote should be taken in each town in order to resolve conflict over religious beliefs.  This way, each city is free to display who they are and what they believe in as a community.

In the capitol city of our country, I believe that our president is entitled to his religious beliefs, whether or not they involve Christ in Christmas.  Each individual serving our country should be free to display his or her religion at any time and at any place, with moderation, of course.  Our leaders are free individuals and not government displays.

So can we allow ourselves to be open-minded people, remembering that each individual here on earth is entitled to his or her beliefs?  Next time the holiday season roles around, let’s refrain from taking sides or prohibiting others, rather opening up our hearts and our minds in celebration of Christmas. ~

10 Reasons Why You Should Not Use “Essay Help” Sites

I can hardly believe that someone would be stupid and lazy enough to buy an essay offline to get out of schoolwork.  When I looked up the websites listed as “essay help,” I was shocked to realize that people actually pay money to steal someone else’s hard work.  In response to what I discovered, I constructed a list of 10 reasons why using these sites is a bad idea.

  1. Plagiarism is encouraged by these sites.
  2. If the user does not use the exact words of the essay writers, regurgitation of the ideas is still plagiarism.
  3. Readers use the information as easy research, instead of going to the primary sources.
  4. Use of these essays may result in the loss of the user’s education.
  5. A possible bad legal record may constrict the user’s job options.
  6. Taking other’s words shows that the user is too lazy to create his own words.
  7. Stealing others’ words is not right.
  8. Dishonesty of the user’s sources is not right.
  9. Use of these essays proves that the user has learned nothing.

10. In the future when it is necessary for the reader to write his own essay, he will not have mastered the necessary skills.

Moral: Write your own paper through your own hard work!

OMG!!!

Simpsons: “Christmas in December, wow wow wow.  Give me tons of present, now now now.”

Usher: “Honey got a booty like pow, pow, pow.  Honey got some boobies like wow, oh wow.” (http://www.popcrunch.com/did-usher-steal-omg-from-homer-simpson/)

OMG! I can’t believe Usher committed plagiarism against the Simpsons!  The release of Usher’s new album featuring his hit song “OMG” ushered in accusations of plagiarism.   When compared to Homer’s Christmas carol from the Simpsons TV show, Usher’s hit song featured identical rhythm and even similar words and musical intervals.  Usher’s version is certainly more enjoyable to listen to than the Simpson version, and the penalty for the plagiarism became nothing more than short-lived, harsh criticism of Usher.  In support of Usher, Simon Vozick-Levinson of Entertainment Weekly ruled the similarity as a coincidence, and the accusations of plagiarism were dropped.

During my research of musical plagiarism, I discovered that many famous musicians of our day have been accused of stealing another musician’s lyrics, chord progression, or musical idea.  However, most of these similarities are a matter of coincidence rather than cruel intentions on the part of the musician.  In the case of Usher stealing the Simpsons’ song, I believe that if his mistake had been a one-time deal, it would have been safe to conclude it as coincidental.  However, during my research, I found that Usher has once again been accused of plagiarism very recently, leading me to conclude that his carelessness has led to crime.  Perhaps the soft Vozick-Levinson of Entertainment Weekly should have dealt more harshly with hard-core singer of “OMG.”

Be Careful What You Blame

The words “terribly wrong” in the opening sentence of Zimbardo and Duncan’s article “The Demise of Guys,” may either grab your attention with its course truth, or offend you with its offensive description of men.  Personally, I was grabbed by the opening paragraph of the article, eager to read on to find the authors’ reason for such bluntness.

Due to personal experiences with my father growing up, I agree with the authors that addictions such as porn and video games create an angry, unmotivated, and discontented man always seeking more satisfaction than he can ever find.   Because if his sinful habits, my father was never satisfied with the wife God had given him, always expecting more out of her than she could give.  Pornography completely ruined my family’s home, weakening my father, destroying my mother, and harassing my sister and I.

On an opposite note, my best friend, Nickoli, is not a porn addict, nor is he addicted to the TV screen.  He lives a responsible life as a firefighter/EMT and finds his satisfaction in saving lives.  Rather than spending the time that other men would looking at porn, he spends that time playing with his siblings and spending quality time with his girlfriend: me. =)

For their sources, the authors used quotes from research psychologists as the basis for their claims.  However, not many sources were used, nor were many studies referenced in the article.  As convincing as the authors’ claims sounded, I would have felt even more convinced if the authors had involved more research.  Also, I do not believe porn and TV screens to be the only cause of failing men.  What happened to the strong fathers?  Many young men turn out angry and discontent because they had no strong father figures in their lives. Maybe Zimbardo and Duncan’s article should have researched other factors leading to the demise of men.

The two articles criticizing “The Demise of Guys” points out to the reader several serious research mistakes committed by the writers of the article.  The main point of both articles criticizing “The Demise of Guys” is that neither porn nor video games causes the failure of men.  Rather the addiction of these activities does.  Porn and addiction to TV are not the only reasons or even the most serious reasons for men’s negative behavior.  Many other factors in life contribute to men’s frustration, none of which were addressed in Zimbardo and Duncan’s article.  Pornography has been around for ages, yet never have men been so low in their lives as now.  Additionally, many women become addicted to technology just as much if not more than men do.  So, if the screen is the cause of men’s problem, then why are women not suffering as much as men?  These questions and many more were not as fully addressed in “The Demise of Guys” as they should have been.

So before we take every word of an article written in the New York Times as Bible truth, let’s be sure to think critically about the topic addressed. Just remember that because one thing is associated with another, it may not be the cause.  Think logically and do your own research!

Two Winners

In his article “The Boy Behind the Mask,” Tom Hallman shares the unique story of a Portland boy’s physical hardships and overcoming spirit.   Through his writing, Hallman influences his reader to feel the emotional hardships that Sam Lightner felt.  Hallman writes with vivid description, sharing Sam’s insecurity of not knowing who can help him, his fear of not finding a way to survive his physical complications, and his helplessness of living in a world who stares at his deformity.

Hallman draws his reader into Sam’s story, driving the reader forward and heightening their curiosity in finding out how Sam survives his physical limitations.  When I read “The Boy Behind the Mask,” I was immediately captivated by Hallman’s ability to create a story that we as individuals can relate to.  Like Sam, each one of us has had a struggle in our lives that we have either given up on or overcome.  Even though most of us may not have an actual physical deformity like Sam’s, we each have still experienced a deformity in our lives in one way or another.  Personally, I related to the fear Sam experienced with his deformity.  Growing up and even as an adult, I experienced a lot of emotional trauma that affects me even to this day.  Overcoming the deep and lasting negative influences of people from my past has been a huge struggle for me.  Like Sam, I am now choosing to overcome the fear and negative influences of my past by living the life that I have always wanted to live.  Personally, I do not believe that the Pulitzer Prize could have to anyone better deserved than Hallman.  With Sam’s story, Hallman shares an inspiring story that anyone can be blessed by.

The LOL’s in Resumes and Cover Letters

I enjoyed several good laughs while researching hilarious resume and cover letter mistakes.  Each website offered so many funny stories or quotes, but out of each website I always had my favorite.   I hope you enjoy just as many laughs out of these bloopers as I did!

 

http://management.fortune.cnn.com/2007/04/25/10-dumbest-resume-blunders/

When CNNMoney wrote an article on the “10 Dumbest Resume Blunders,” several readers commented on their own resume experiences.  D. Everett submitted my personal favorite resume blunder from this website.  “A resume once showed under Hobbies; Drugs and girls.”  Truly, this applicant was asking for unemployment!

 

http://www.resumark.com/blog/andrew/top-15-of-the-most-hilarious-spelling-mistakes-on-resumes-and-cover-letters/

I enjoyed the Resumark website for its ironic resume bloopers.   Through the applicant’s lack of attention, every listed quality was ironically negated.   For example, one applicant wrote: “I am a perfectionist and rarely if if ever forget details.”  Suuuure, buddy!  You just proved yourself wrong.

 

http://humormatters.com/workresume.htm

Fortune Magazine’s hilarious resume quotes share a common factor of absolute ridiculousness.  From the 1997 issue comes one of my personal favorites:  “I have an excellent track record, although I am not a horse.”  Wouldn’t the fact that the applicant’s resume was written indicate his humanity?  Apparently, he felt that he needed to make sure.

 

http://www.careerbuilder.com/Article/CB-1485-Cover-Letters-Resumes-Weird-and-Wacky-Things-Actually-Written-on-Résumés/

CareerBuilder.com shared some of their “weirdest and wackiest” resume slip-ups.  Heather Huhman posted one of her weirdest resume experiences.  “I always tell people to include their relocation details up top of their resume and I received one that read, ‘Researching condoms in the local Washington, DC area.’”  Honestly as the reader, I don’t want to know any more details than that.

 

http://www.careerbuilder.com/Article/CB-1485-Cover-Letters-Resumes-Weird-and-Wacky-Things-Actually-Written-on-Résumés/

Some of the best resume mistakes are the ones in which the applicant shares life goals, objectives, or hobbies.  Chequed.com tells of some pretty unique goals!  My favorite happens to be the first one listed on the website:  “Objective: To become Overlord of the Galaxy!”  I was impressed.

Summarizing, Paraphrasing, and Quoting

Research papers have loomed over each one of our heads at one time or another.  Probably one of the biggest challenges of writing a research paper is understanding why, when, or how to use quotes, summarizes, or paraphrases.  After all, what does paraphrasing mean?  How do you know when to summarize?  When do you quote, or when do you paraphrase?  Each one of these questions has probably boggled your mind at one point or another.

In Student’s Guide to Writing College Papers, Kate Turabain suggest “summariz[ing] when details are irrelevant or a source isn’t important enough to only use the crucial points in your summary.”  Summarizing is the most effective way to keep your topic from becoming bogged down with other irrelevant information from your sources.  To summarize, you simply select the information that supports your argument and summarize the idea into your own words.   As a word of warning, however, be careful to cite the source of your summary if your sentence structure is close to the original sentence structure of your article.  No worries, though, if your summary is very different from the original; you are safe to call the summary your own without citation.

Another great way to portray an idea in your research is through paraphrasing.   Paraphrasing shares the idea of the source, not its exact words. Usually paraphrases are shorter than the original quote.  They are the best choice if not all of the information in the article is necessary to support your argument.  At times, you may even be able to explain the information in a more understandable way than the original source does.  Once again, however, beware of plagiarism by citing the source of your paraphrase.  It is much better to be safe than expelled!

Last, but certainly not least, quotes play a very important role in sharing the pure thoughts of others.  Quotes support you with evidence, share clearly stated ideas, back your views with authority, and frame your discussions. (Turabain pg. 89-90) They may also be used to quote those with whom we disagree yet insist on being fair to.  Quoting is most often used when an author portrays a complex idea in a more understandable way than we could.  Other times, quoting is used as an authoritative support for our ideas. When you have a long, complicated quote, Turabian suggests that “you… speak for it by adding a sentence stating what you want your readers to get out of it.” (pg. 97)  Of course you must also always remember to cite your quotes since they are an exact copy of someone else’s words.

So what about those confusing times when you don’t know when to cite or when not to cite?  If you do not know whether or not you should cite, be on the safe side by citing your sources.  However, there are a few instances when it is unnecessary for you to cite.   When you are sharing common knowledge or common opinion don’t worry about citing your sources.  If you are unsure whether or not your information is common, be sure to check with your teacher.  When it comes to plagiarism, you always want to play it safe.

So next time that big essay shows up to scare you, create the perfect essay by using your new tools of summarization, paraphrasing, and quoting. You may be surprised how scholarly your essay will sound with all of your supporting citations.   Just don’t forget to give the credit where credit is due.  Good luck!